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You are certainly an.....interesting....individual.

Well.. not that subtle in its entirety...

Okey.

Hey, this is funny, cuz I have just done my own comic.
I can put it here too, but I must say that I'm not very good in english, so maybe someone could help me to repair my (stupid?) mistakes in this comic?
Please.
And tell me what you think about it!

HERE it is.

I'm a big fan of Don Rosa. As you see from my style (i doesn't copied those pictures from his stories, my style is just so similar).
That is my first Donald Duck -comic that I have ever drew.
I have some manuscripts, but that was first I've drew.
Okey, tell me what you think, and please, if you have time, tell me about those mistakes in the text.
Thanks.

Sir. Decadence wrote:Okey.

Hey, this is funny, cuz I have just done my own comic.
I can put it here too, but I must say that I'm not very good in english, so maybe someone could help me to repair my (stupid?) mistakes in this comic?
Please.
And tell me what you think about it!

HERE it is.

I'm a big fan of Don Rosa. As you see from my style (i doesn't copied those pictures from his stories, my style is just so similar).
That is my first Donald Duck -comic that I have ever drew.
I have some manuscripts, but that was first I've drew.
Okey, tell me what you think, and please, if you have time, tell me about those mistakes in the text.
Thanks.

Sure, I have some time to fix up some English for ya, here we go:

Hello, cousin. Is there anything else eating than you, maybe some fishies? No?

This sounds a little better though: "Is there anyone besides you eating? Maybe some fish?"

Please somebody tell me that isn't...

"Don't tell me thats..." makes more sense. While in that frame, add "the" before "lottery".

But you can fish anything else than those stupid rings or perhaps fishy crowns? Ha, you have not skills for fishing, cousin...

"Why don't you go fish somwhere else, like those stupid rings or those fishy crowns? Oh wait, you have no skill to fish, cousin..."

Although, I'm not sure what you mean by the "stpid rings" or "fishy crowns", so that might be wrong.

...ok so I'm getting tired of quoting eveything, so lets just go frame by frame now:

"...With my new fortune, I can fish for as much fish as I want. Hell, I can catch a thousand fish at one cast if I wanted to..."

"..Now you're losing your mind! Catch a thousand fish...at one cast!...Shall we bet on it? I'll bet ya 100 euros if I can do it?"

"...No one could do that. So how can he?"

"Oh crap, how can this be happening to me!? It's caught on to something!...HA, you weren't able to get it into the water! Why was I worried at all in the first place?"

"Hey, idiot! Get your damn lure off my truck, NOW! I have to transport these thousands of fish to the refinery, andI won't be late!...See, Donald, at least a thousand fish!..."

There, that should do it! Hope it helps.

Upon Preview of post: HOLY SHIT! I wrote a lot!

Hey, thanks, dude!
Okey, I can't (or I don't want to) put those Disney characters to say "hell".
What you mean with that "new fortune"?
Is it some kind of phrase, cuz I think Gladstone always have had his fortune?
And with that "stupid rings" I mean only that Gladstone always catch up rings and that "fishy crowns" has signal to one Don Rosa's story.
And "fishy" is also funny word to that situation.
Oh, well, I will fix my mistakes when I have time to do that.
Thank you very much!

Sir. Decadence wrote: What you mean with that "new fortune"?

The frame where he says "...With my new fortune..." or something like that! Sorry about the cussing, didn't know this would be presented to a younger audience!


and btw, happy to help!

nice , funny stuff!!!!

Neorave wrote:

Sir. Decadence wrote: What you mean with that "new fortune"?

The frame where he says "...With my new fortune..." or something like that!

Well, in my version there's not any "new"-word, so that's why I'm a little bit puzzled.
Maybe you have put it there accidentaly.
But you haven't read any Disney-comics?
They never use any bad words.

Sorry, I didn't know this was a Disney-based comic!

Neorave wrote:Sorry, I didn't know this was a Disney-based comic!

Really?
You didn't know that Donald Duck and Gladstone Gander are Disney-characters... or what?
Maybe Donald Duck is too popular here in Finland... here almost everybody reads Donald Duck.
Were do you live actually?

Sir. Decadence wrote: Really?
You didn't know that Donald Duck and Gladstone Gander are Disney-characters... or what?
Maybe Donald Duck is too popular here in Finland... here almost everybody reads Donald Duck.
Were do you live actually?

Yes, I know it's Donald Duck (Gladstone Gander never showed up here in America), he's one of the big icons for Disney. I just didn't expect a Disney-based comic.

Now I have made new version of my comic.
I hope there isn't any mistakes anymore.

HERE it is!

What do you think?

Sir. Decadence wrote:Now I have made new version of my comic.
I hope there isn't any mistakes anymore.

HERE it is!

What do you think?

Excellent! Much Better! The english makes more sense now !