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any1 with poetry on his head?
Posted: Sun Feb 25, 2007 4:10 pm
by the_black.iris
such of the wind that burns my eyes... lie the beauty of death, the reaper in disguise... the philosephy of truth within the rhymes of metal... the beat of my heart with every struck of base... the courtesy of judgement and distruction... such of which arises with doomsday... the construction... of distruction... the building of a revolution... and the clock strikes of the revelation of truth!
written by OOBAZO (A.K.A. the black iris)
my latest poem
Posted: Sun Feb 25, 2007 11:47 pm
by the_black.iris
a celebration in black
its been two years
and i celebrate in black
the oath is fulfilled...
now i'm back in black!
the legend of fire...
and the fury of its atack
a lone warrior... had i held it back!
and again, i celebrate in black
judge not her soul
by the abyss of her eyes
for i see them in the moon
a road to eternity...
a stairway to her room
its nbeen two years now...
and i'm keeping my oath...
for i'll see her soon!
whenever the time is right...
she'll call my tune...
a departure in the ides of june!
a reserection of love
the triumph of glory...
in the beauty of the rain...
hiding out the tears...
caused by my pain!
its been two years now...
my soldier of fortune...
has broken through the chain...
i've celebrated my love in black...
as i've been walking in the rain!
half of my oath is done..
with no more love to strain...
the day has come to an end...
the sun has set...
apon the semetary of my heart...
as we all walk in the funeral of venus...
in my tomb of roses...
in my heart... i lay...
the coffin of our love...
on valentine's day!
i wrote it on my own... so please... leave and let in peace... dont temper with my thoughts.. please just dont steal it! write ur own... i could help you if you want... just write ur own!
Re: any1 with poetry on his head?
Posted: Mon Feb 26, 2007 2:42 am
by Stealth
There's already a topic for poems. It's called "Lyrics, Poems etc. that you like and their meaning to you". What you wrote here should go in that topic.
And two more things: Your poetry is very safe; I don't think you need to worry about anyone stealing it.

Furthermore, I'd hate to throw you off your pedestal, but I don't think you are qualified to help us with our writing. Finally, allow me to recommend a program called "Microsoft Word". It can correct the many spelling mistakes that you've made.

And yes, spelling
is as important as style.
Re: any1 with poetry on his head?
Posted: Mon Feb 26, 2007 4:40 am
by NeonVomit
Stealth wrote:There's already a topic for poems. It's called "Lyrics, Poems etc. that you like and their meaning to you". What you wrote here should go in that topic.
And two more things: Your poetry is very safe; I don't think you need to worry about anyone stealing it.

Furthermore, I'd hate to throw you off your pedestal, but I don't think you are qualified to help us with our writing. Finally, allow me to recommend a program called "Microsoft Word". It can correct the many spelling mistakes that you've made.

And yes, spelling
is as important as style.
Once again, Stealth leaves me not needing to say a thing...
Re: any1 with poetry on his head?
Posted: Mon Feb 26, 2007 3:13 pm
by the_black.iris
Stealth wrote:
There's already a topic for poems. It's called "Lyrics, Poems etc. that you like and their meaning to you". What you wrote here should go in that topic.
And two more things: Your poetry is very safe; I don't think you need to worry about anyone stealing it. Furthermore, I'd hate to throw you off your pedestal, but I don't think you are qualified to help us with our writing. Finally, allow me to recommend a program called "Microsoft Word". It can correct the many spelling mistakes that you've made. And yes, spelling is as important as style.
Once again, Stealth leaves me not needing to say a thing...
guys... the title says... poems and lyrics you LIKE... these are poems i WROTE!
there is a big difference!
Re: any1 with poetry on his head?
Posted: Mon Feb 26, 2007 6:55 pm
by Stealth
True, because these are NOT poems I like!
In any case, the other topic is meant to include poems that you like AND/OR wrote... After all, you probably LIKE the poems you WROTE. As long as you like them, you should include them there... It doesn't matter if you wrote them, vomited them, shat them, or found them in the street.
@ NeonVomit: Thanks for the comment.

Re: any1 with poetry on his head?
Posted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 2:23 am
by NeonVomit
Now now, no need to be so harsh to the n00b
There is another topic for this already, we'd suggest you post your writings in there.
very well...
Posted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 7:52 pm
by the_black.iris