My Demo - After Forever

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My Demo - After Forever

Post by innerdream » Sun Feb 27, 2005 1:51 pm

Hi all

Would you mind taking a listen to one of my songs – After Forever – at my soundclick page at the link below

http://www.soundclick.com/util/streamM3 ... 43799&q=Hi

Your comments and views are most welcome on all areas (guitars, vocals, lyrics, melody / harmonies, dynamics etc)

Cheers

Lyrics
Alone and contemplating the future that now lies ahead
The goddess will be waiting, to her beauty I am now led

Who am I? - I’ll sail across the sea of life
Where am I? - Searching for a place I could call home
Who am I? - Someone who believed so much
Where am I? - On my quest to free her forever

Fighting in glory for eternity
I’ll tell the story forever, forever

A thousand miles I’ve traveled, I’ve braved the fire wind and rain
The chapter still unwritten, the chance for glory still remains

Who am I? - I’ll sail across the sea of life
Where am I? - Searching for a place I could call home
Who am I? - Someone who believed so much
Where am I? - On my quest to free her forever

Fighting in glory for eternity
I’ll tell the story forever, forever

(©PFM 27/02/2005)

For other InnerDream songs, news, updates etc click on the link below

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/9/innerdreammusic.htm
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Re: My Demo - After Forever

Post by innerdream » Wed Mar 02, 2005 1:33 am

does anyone have any thoughts on the song? :)
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Re: My Demo - After Forever

Post by Neorave » Wed Mar 02, 2005 9:13 pm

WOW, I haven't been in this part of the forum in a while.

I love the melody, especially the synthesizer in the background.

The only big concearn is balance. The vocals are being outnumbered by the rest of the insturments, it was somewhat hard to tell where you were. Try to up the volume on the vocals, and (if possible) balance the overall stereo sound. I could mostly hear the right side, the left was hard to hear. And (you've heard this from me already) get a drummer, it'll help keep time in the song.

Other than that, overall great song. Keep up the good work!!! :)
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Re: My Demo - After Forever

Post by innerdream » Wed Mar 02, 2005 10:49 pm

Cheers Neorave - glad you liked the melodies :)

I have had problems balancing out the left and right side in the mix
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