A singer has problem with right timing (sings too fast, it sounds quite funny) as well as guitar player in last part when chorus strats from D# (lick in background, I think he got lost, or maybe my impression is caused by poor quality of the record). Generally you need more rehalsal and try to hold your emotion and concentrate on a proper tempo.
Singer is also out of tune. It is hard to sing like TK, because of his unique high voice. I know thi problem, because I also recorded this song (only guitars and vocals. Other tracks, like drums, bas and keys I made using midi file). It was a good fun until singing. When it came to record vocals I realized that it's impossible to me to sing it in tune, I just recorded them to make it complete, though it was very exciting experirnce and still amusing, and it sounds really funny (read: bad 

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But maybe someone of you feels up to sing it right? I could send music, and if someone of you can sing it and mix, and send me back, that could be quite interesting. An international, virtual band 
