My Demo - Stormy Skies

[innerdream]

Hello everyone

I have written and recorded a new song – Stormy Skies – please feel free to have a listen via the link below and your feedback on the song all areas (guitars, vocals, lyrics, melody / harmonies, dynamics etc) is most welcome

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemus ... dID=252119

Lyrics

Each word you speak to me makes me now believe, makes me start to dream
Sometimes the doubts still fill my mind
Was it just a dream or just another broken lie?

I will travel to the distant future, I will travel to the distant sun
Someday I’ll fly away
Now the feelings deep within my soul will be the guide into my conscious thoughts
Someday I’ll fly away

Everyday I start to cry
Searching for answers I must find
Everyday I question why
My life is like the stormy skies

Each time you come to me, deep inside my heart I feel were apart
Once we were stronger every day
Now it seems the memory has slowly ebbed away

I will travel to the distant future, I will travel to the distant sun
Someday I’ll fly away
Now the feelings deep within my soul will be the guide into my conscious thoughts
Someday I’ll fly away

Everyday I start to cry
Searching for answers I must find
Everyday I question why
My life is like the stormy skies

(c) PFM 07/11/05

[innerdream]

does anyone have any thoughts / views on the song?

[Miguel_Ricardo]

Next time try hosting it somewhere you don't have to sign up or something (that's why I didn't listen it the 1st time.. sorry about that)

Well its lack of drums says a lot, I can't make many accurate opinions because of that.

1 thing I may chang eis the intro, its like,.. too agressive, like I would expect a more calmed intro... I dunno is just me

Dynamism I can't tell where the songs get deeper or not because of the lack of drums but I see some idea going on there , keep working!

[innerdream]

Next time try hosting it somewhere you don't have to sign up or something (that's why I didn't listen it the 1st time.. sorry about that)

Well its lack of drums says a lot, I can't make many accurate opinions because of that.

1 thing I may chang eis the intro, its like,.. too agressive, like I would expect a more calmed intro... I dunno is just me

Dynamism I can't tell where the songs get deeper or not because of the lack of drums but I see some idea going on there , keep working!

Cheers for taking a listen and posting your thoughts I agree drums would add a lot to the song - I orignially planned to have some keyboard work in the intro but I struggled to find the right notes / chords to match the guitar harmonies

[Neorave]

Soundclick is ok, not the greatest, but it works.

Nice and soft, it's very soothing at the beginning, very good. The chords at the beginning are wonderful. Vocals are very good, gives it that old 80s feel.

As far as adding drums, I'm kind of conflicted on that. There are points where it sounds great even without drums, but there would probably be some points where you could add in drums. One thing you might try is adding some drum sound effects when you edit your pieces.

Once again, another excellent composition from Innerdream. Keep up the excellent work.

[innerdream]

Soundclick is ok, not the greatest, but it works.

Nice and soft, it's very soothing at the beginning, very good. The chords at the beginning are wonderful. Vocals are very good, gives it that old 80s feel.

As far as adding drums, I'm kind of conflicted on that. There are points where it sounds great even without drums, but there would probably be some points where you could add in drums. One thing you might try is adding some drum sound effects when you edit your pieces.

Once again, another excellent composition from Innerdream. Keep up the excellent work.

Thanks for the kind words I also considered addind another guitar harmony part to the intro to add even more of a mystical / epic egde but I really struggled to find the right notes / chords to complement what I already had