My Demo - Heart Of A Warrior

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My Demo - Heart Of A Warrior

Post by innerdream » Thu Dec 02, 2004 10:54 pm

Hi all

Would you mind taking a listen to one of my songs – Heart Of A Warrior – at my soundclick page at the link below

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/9/innerdreammusic.htm

Your comments and views are most welcome on all areas (guitars, vocals, lyrics, melody / harmonies, dynamics etc)

Cheers

Lyrics
All you need is someone to know that your heart is made out of stone
And the dream you’re wishing of is to reclaim mankind’s throne
Day after day, night after night fighting for the cause that will crush the machines
Day after day, night after night destiny so clear

Heart of a man, he’ll make the stand
The warrior, the one the brave

You’ve become a leader of men and you’ll stay through the war until the end
There’s no need now to pretend, you’re the warrior all want to be
Day after day, night after night winning the freedom that once was lost
Day after day, night after night destiny so clear

(©PFM 2/12/2004)
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Re: My Demo - Heart Of A Warrior

Post by MaFiaBoY » Fri Dec 03, 2004 8:59 am

The lyrics are quite good, I'll check out the music when I'll get my computer repaired.

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Re: My Demo - Heart Of A Warrior

Post by Neorave » Fri Dec 03, 2004 4:13 pm

Excellent melody and sound. Vocals and a little of the harmonies are a little distorted, try to make the vocals a little clearer, and the timing of your vocals of the chorus is just a little off. Plus (if you can add this), try adding in some drums in this song. Other than that, excellent song!
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Re: My Demo - Heart Of A Warrior

Post by innerdream » Sat Dec 04, 2004 11:06 am

Cheers for your views - Hopefully I will be jamming / forming a band ASAP :)
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Re: My Demo - Heart Of A Warrior

Post by Iron_Rider » Wed Jan 12, 2005 3:49 am

cool song , but it could've been better with drums

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Re: My Demo - Heart Of A Warrior

Post by SkullKrusher » Wed Jan 12, 2005 4:21 am

it's a really good song but it needs drums to give it a driving feel. That's basically it, and clearer vocals, neorave said it all. But it is really good and I like the lyrics.
When a Man Lies He Murders Some Part of the World
These Are the Pale Deaths Which Men Miscall Their Lives
All this I Cannot Bear to Witness Any Longer
Cannot the Kingdom of Salvation Take Me Home

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Re: My Demo - Heart Of A Warrior

Post by innerdream » Thu Jan 13, 2005 7:18 pm

cheers for the replies everyone :D
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